Lethal injection is a
controversial topic in America today with stakeholders on both side
of the issue. Lethal injection is an method of euthanasia as a means
of capital punishment. Hanging, electrocution, firing squad, and
lethal injection are the main methods that capital punishment is
currently enforced. There are two types of lethal injection, a single
drug dose and the three drug process. What happens during the
procedures is that drugs are injected into the convict, and it
creates a “high” feeling and they slowly go numb and die. As it
stands, lethal injection is the most humane way to go about ending a
person's life, because little to no pain is caused by the procedure.
However, there have been many cases that disprove this argument.
While inmates and their families are against the use of lethal
injection, law enforcers, law-abiding citizens, and employees of the
criminal justice system are all for the use of lethal injection.
An example of a lethal injection
going sour is the case of Dennis McGuire. Dennis Mcguire was
sentenced to lethal injection after the murder of a 22-year old
pregnant women. His case was extreme, because normally the victim
would die in a matter of minutes, but McGuire suffered for nearly 10
minutes. Struggling and gasping could be heard from the victim, and
there is a debate on whether he actually suffered or not. Was this an
ethical procedure? Anesthesiologists say that there is a chance that
the victim may feel pain, but it is rare. One could argue that the
use of lethal injections violates the eighth amendment on “cruel
and unusual punishment,” but that person already committed a cruel
and unusual punishment in order to be on trial.
How do the stakeholders take
place in the use of lethal injection? Inmates seek to not be
executed; they would rather serve years in prison than be executed.
The families of the convict want the inmate to be exonerated; they do
not want to have to seek closure to their loved ones. The families of
the victim want the convict to be punished. They may not think life
in prison is enough, and they want the convict to suffer. The state
of California has spent more than $4 billion on the use of capital
punishment since 1978. If capital punishment ceased to exist, than
states would have more money to spend on education and funding, but
one could argue that more crimes would be committed due to no death
penalty. The average cost per inmate on death row is approximately
$90,000, and it takes years to process someone for the death penalty.
This method is costly, and it is not efficient as it could be.
Works
Cited
Lyman,
Rick. "Ohio Execution Using Untested Drug Cocktail Renews the
Debate Over Lethal Injections." The
New York Times.
The New York Times, 16 Jan. 2014. Web. 18 Feb. 2014
Matthew, you have an amazing start to this essay! First, I really like the way you organized the paper. It is very clear and concise what the point of your work is and where you are trying to go with it. Second, it was a very good idea explaining how the procedure works and what the possible problems are with it. This is important because some people might not understand how the process works before reading on this issue. In addition, you effortlessly but effectively address a couple of stakeholders and their point of views on the topic. Your paper illustrates a clear line between them and where they stand on the issue of lethal injection. Maybe one more thing you could do to add to the paper would be inserting another example of a controversial execution. This way there are even more points to back up your paper. Very nice work so far though!
ReplyDeleteThis is such a great start to your essay. There are many things within this draft that I really love and that, to me, are extremely effective in proving your point. First off, it was great that in the first paragraph, it was very clear to me that the stakeholders were introduced. I liked that you stated who the stakeholders were and also included some basic information on your topic (lethal injection). I also thought that including an example of an execution case within your paper in its own paragraph was very effective and beneficial toward convincing your audience. I think that, in general, your paper has great structure and it’s clear where your ideas lie. The only thing I would suggest is to fix the minor conventional errors, but that’s about it. Great job Matthew!
ReplyDeleteI like how you first started this off with informing the readers what lethal injection is and gave an overall definition to educate the readers before going into it. It definitely got me hooked right into the paper which is an awesome start to getting people hooked in. The stakeholders are very clear, and your points are very solid. The example you gave really struck a strong sense of pathos to me as I read it, and the overall paper is very interesting. Just slide in a couple more examples and I don’t see why not you shouldn’t have a really good paper.
ReplyDeleteYou did a fantastic job of explaining lethal injection in your first paragraph. Though it had me interested from the start, I can see how it might not fully grab the attention of the reader. Perhaps include a grabbing element before you start to explain the issue at hand (which you did incredibly well I might add). Great transition into the example you readily had to provide as evidence, and the intermittent questions you have speckled throughout the essay does a good job of keeping the reader intrigued and answering the questions they may already have. Another great transition into stakeholders and their positions while including an economic factor and introducing a position on a grander scale. Your opinion as well as the others seemed to be properly mapped out. Overall a good job.
ReplyDeleteMatthew, your essay draft's introduction works pretty well to introduce the topic at hand, clearly identifying what you are going to be talking about. There are a few minor errors here and there, but overall it does its job. I am not exactly sure how the second paragraph directly ties into your argument. Perhaps you could state that it is an example that supports a certain stakeholder or group's view as the introductory sentence. One thing you could consider is to identify the stakeholders first, before you state examples for them. You could place the third paragraph before the second one, so that readers know about the stakeholders when you state your examples, so that they better understand the conflict that is at hand. Another possibility is that you could have a paragraph for each stakeholder and the example that support's that stakeholders view. This would provide a pretty logical structure to your essay. Overall, with some minor adjustments, your essay will be pretty solid.
ReplyDeleteI like the way you introduce the subject and tell the reader that there are evidence from both sides of the stakeholders to back it up. Also you explain the process very well and use topics the reader can relate too. I think you need to capture the readers attention more however because there were a couple spots I felt like you were just rambling on at but overall it was good. Just some minor fixes and the essay will be great.
ReplyDeleteMatthew, you did a well job in presenting the stakeholders on each side of the argument. You showed the argument from both sides so readers were able to get a more clear understand of the article itself. I like how you started with an example regarding the topic then broke the example down by determining stakeholders. The blog is organized nicely and is an easy read. Be careful to not reiterate the same thing over and over,, but overall well done.
ReplyDeleteMatthew, the essay so far looks pretty good. The opening sentence I feel, however, could be improved. It feels too much like you're saying "this is what my essay is about." Instead you could write something else to hook the reader in. The paragraph describing lethal injection definitely helps shed some light on the topic you're about to explain, and does its job well. The second and third paragraph I think need to be switched. Providing an example of an extreme case of lethal injections before introducing the stakeholders seems to do the opposite of what it needs to do. As Mittal said, if you identify the stakeholders then provide the example, it is much more effective. Your writing style is great, and with some adjustments, this essay will certainly be one worth reading!
ReplyDeleteYou did a good job presenting the arguments of both sides of the issues but you may want to watch out how you generalize each side. You stated that all inmates and their families are against lethal injection and basically everyone else is against it which is simply not true. There are plenty of law enforcers and normal citizens that are against lethal injection or simply execution. However the rest of your essay is pretty spot on and you have a great start to the essay.
ReplyDeleteI liked how you started off with first beginning with talking about the stakeholders and went on to describe about what lethal injection is and even other forms of execution. I also like how immediately after that you went on to talk about a specific case and that really hooks the reader in. You really have a great start and cant wait to read more.
ReplyDeleteI like this essay so far. There's a decent amount of background info and it's easy to tell where you stand. You address different stakeholders and people in general categories and reasons why they hold their opinions. This draft is on a good path. Keep up the good work.
ReplyDeleteThis was a very well written essay. You started off great with your introduction and gave a nice detailed explanation of lethal injection. The structure of your essay was very organized and it flowed well. The stakeholders' arguments from both sides were well covered and well presented. The only suggestion I can really give you would be to include more examples of cases in which struggling and suffering after lethal injection came into question. Overall, your essay stayed strong throughout its entirety and you ended it very well with your concluding sentence.
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