Dear Jana,
Thank you for sharing your documentary! I felt really
touched by the subject’s willingness to share so openly and honestly with the
viewers. The close-ups in the opening scene along with the perfect music choice
set a respectful, comfortable tone. Your subject was framed in the shot at the
correct 1/3rd proportion that lent the scene a conversational feel.
The shot was clear, bright, and not overly lit: I could see the subject’s face
clearly and the camera was still. In terms of content, I did not feel confused
or have the need to hear the interview questions in order to have context for
what she was saying. I understood the intent of the interview and her talking
heads were well-chosen.
I wonder if there is anything hiding in your interview roll
that might lend itself to an ending that leaves viewers with an idea about what
her life is like now. My suggestion is to comb through the interview footage
for some kind of soundbite that speaks to her life now, her views on the nature
of love, her relationship with her parents, or something that tells us just a
little inkling about what is going to happen in her life down the road.
Again, I commend you for the lovely nature of the
documentary—it has a lilting and lovely feel and covers the topic with a
palpable sensitivity. Also, great cutaways.
Looking forward to seeing the final draft!
Courtney
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